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Fantasy Man Monday

I have a confession. I started out with my teen daughters loving the series of Grey’s Anatomy. We were faithful viewers. We would rush home on Thursday nights to see the next installment in the tv medical drama. We were there to giggle with the reveal of McDreamy, McSteamy, McHottie.

Then somewhere along the line we fell away. Like any habit we got “out of it”. Too much of the McWierd, McDrama, McOMG unbelievable happened.

Do writers of series feel the same way. How do you continue a 10 book or more legacy in the world you have built. Anne McCaffrey did it well with her Dragon Riders of Pern world and ensuing so-many-I-lost-count trilogy after trilogy. JR Ward does it quite well with the Black Dagger Brotherhood series. Fans are rabid for the characters. Sherilyn Kenyon does it…. The list can go on.

How do writers sustain and feed the flames of giddy fangirldom for such a long run?

I think it must be the characters. The intricate layers of personality and emotion within a well built world and finely crafted story.

Similar to our Fantasy Men each week. There is mystery and depth. I can look at a lot of fantasy men. Yet, they eyes draw me in to make the picture more. Often I have seen the photograph of a model and the ideas for a character have launched.

Take a look at Mathias Lauriden of Denmark. He is a sizzling sensation in the modeling industry, yes even high fashion. Okay I guess today is cougar day cause these ‘boys’ are pretty young.

The moment I saw him I recognized a character I had been thinking of.

And the second model I chose today…Sadly was promoted on another blog and I couldn’t find his name. I did a lot of model searches trying to find out his name and where they had copped his photo from. So, sorry mystery fantasy man. But those eyes… I had to show him.

(If anyone knows who he is, please advise. I like to give credit where credit is due.)

The men I have chosen over the course of a year plus for Fantasy Man Monday have a commonality. Their image is engaging. You see their face, their body and you see more…the visual representation draws you in and you ‘see’ a story.

I hope my writing work has the same qualities as my fantasy men. I hope to be able to sustain a readership through my worlds and stories as successfully as my writing role models have done.

What do you think? Is this quality craft that you can learn? Or is there an innate talent that some authors have and the rest of us will never ever be able to touch?

Confessions and Lies

Do you like the catchy title? It’s a great topic for April Fool’s Day. My new friend Jean Cohen Joachim from our Naughty Romance Writers group on Face book popped that comment out there with blog ideas.

I started thinking….. and that could be a dangerous consequence. But here goes. Remember, erotic paranormal romance writer here!!! All that inspiration had to come from somewhere. Okay disclaimer done.

Can you guess which comments below are Confessions and which are Lies? It will be interesting to read your comments and see what you think! And when all is said and done….I can pull the April Fool’s card if I need to. Drum roll please. The sexy six are…….

6. I was taught to swim by a mermaid.

5. I am an international traveler. One of my most amazing memories is making out on the deck of a yacht with a pair of hotties. They were traveling around the world on the boat? ship? and paused for a while near the island where I was living.

4. One of my Lovers had eyes the color of golden amber. Like a lion he was. grrrrreow.

3. I was a finalist in the Miss Guanaja beauty pageant when I was a teen.

2. I have tasted the rainbow and love sucking on skittles. Unabashed, unapologetic, bisexual here.

1. I once pee’d on a missionaries foot after he stepped on poisonous sea life. I saved him a whole lot of pain and infection with my rescue first aid.

Now what do you think? Confessions…..or …..Lies????

Writer’s Coloring Box

Continuing on my story of what it means to have weak, or strong writing and my personal eureka experience. See earlier blog post(s)

In the course of editing I have those cards I told you about that I flip through. There are different words on the cards that, one at a time, I check through my manuscript and edit. It does sound rather laborious. Maybe as time goes on I will find an easier way to do it but this is the process at this point.

The first word on my list is “was”. I try to limit the number of ‘was’ words on the page to three or four. I find when I eliminate the ‘was’, I usually structure a stronger sentence. Too many ‘was’ and I hear a lisping buzzz when I read my pages.

I also look at “ly” words. I strive to minimize the number of words ending in ‘ly’. I find that when I re-write the sentence I am able to use more powerful words that give me greater meaning than an ‘ly’ word would have produced.

I do the same process for “that”. There are many times that is an unnecessary word. The sentence will have equal meaning with or without the ‘that’ word. At times ‘that’ is a meaningless word. For example, in the sentence — He mused aloud, hoping to draw out knowledge that the warrior might not realize that he possessed. Yes, I know there are lots of problems with this sentence. However, Take out the ‘that’ words and the meaning doesn’t really change. You have — He mused aloud, hoping to draw out knowledge the warrior might not realize he possessed. It is still an awkward weak sentence but I think it illustrates the point I was making. It is certainly better without the ‘that’ words muddying it up.

Another word on my card deck, is “it”. I can’t remember who told me that the word ‘it’ was a parasite sucking meaning out of sentences. I examine each usage of ‘it’ and work hard to give a word that has real meaning.

I have another collection of favorite words that I over use because they are convenient. Shrugged, smiled, growled. You know the list of words that you tend to stick in when you are drafting along. Look for those and reduce the echo.

There are more words on my cards. Some help me identify passive writing. Others identify places where I am distancing the reader with un-necessary words like She felt, She thought, etc.

I think as I become more experienced I will write tighter drafts without as many of these common weak writing flaws.

How about you. What do you edit for?

Fantasy Man Monday

Fantasy Man Monday is a sports model, Jed Hill. I found him on a blog called Drews Sims Stories

She reports that Jed specializes in sport modeling. He is a former Penn State foot ball player. Now he models for romance covers that specialize in chest or back views. He is causing quite a stir! What do you think?

I think I’m ready to take up boxing.

Writers Coloring Box

I have had a eureka experience I have to share. I read voraciously. I think it is an essential part of the universe, readers write or perhaps better writers read. I have favorite authors at all levels of the stratosphere from epub to mid-list to NYT best sellers. There are certain qualities I fall in love with that causes their work to be a keeper for me.

Throughout this journey I have pondered good writing. At first I thought perhaps it was a sense of quality plot. All the I’s dotted and T’s crossed that the threads came together at the end with a plausible believable resolution. That became an ingredient to the stew but certainly more was indicated in my recipe for quality writing.

Next I considered character. All my keepers have great characters. People I want to take the journey with. People I grow to care about. People who are believable with their own imperfections and totally multi dimensional. They could be my friends. They exhibit a character growth through the book to become better on their own pathway through life.

Some day I want to meet Judith Ehrlich She was a final round Judge in the Beacon unpublished 2010 and gave my entry a thorough critique. She was detailed and objective. She is also a shrewed insightful woman. In the thirty something pages she critiqued for the contest, she said a lot of wonderful good things. Things that made me laugh and clap my hands like a six year old whose momie liked the rainbow I drew.

However, some very real problematic issues arose. I have a lot to thank her for in taking the time to make that critique and the tone that she used both encouraging yet honest without guile. References to weak writing and that my heroine was a “prop” for the two dynamic heroes. Now before my friends get out their pitchforks and get all up-de-up. Let me say — I understood perfectly what she said and I agree. I love my “boys” I have a wonderful male voice in my writing. My heroes leap off the page. My girls fell flat.

I spent about four months reading strong heroines. I wrote fan fiction for myself playing with a female character I admired. She was strong yet vulnerable and I understood her well. As a result, I acquired a good female voice for my heroines. I recognized character is another essential element to quality. Yet, she said weak writing so there was more.

Along this same line and about the same time my main critique partner and I spent an evening talking about writing. She had received a series of encouraging requests. First for 20 pages, then 20 more, then 20 more. I don’t know why they didn’t just request the whole thing. But that is how it went. I agonized for her each time the agent requested twenty more pages. We just knew this was it. A contract had to be in the works.

Please allow me to digress a little bit and say other than my own writing. I adore my critique partner’s work. Her stories are vivid, the pieces come together at the end and are threaded along the way. I love the people she creates. I mean really love them. I wish they were my people. I want to wrap them up and take them home and hear all about their lives forever and every. I could go on. She is one of the smartest women I know and I am so grateful for her influence in my writing through her excellent critique. Okay, okay so stage set.

So, why on EARTH after sixty pages did they reject her work saying all the right things, all the good things about the Manuscript, the plot, the characters — but….always the but… Something like– the writing just wasn’t consistently strong enough.

WTF? Consistently strong enough? *see the incredulous expression on MY face* It really threw me for a loop. If my C.P’s work wasn’t ‘consistently strong enough’ what did I have to offer. I call myself blessed to creep in her shadow as a minion.

It caused me to do a lot of thinking. I looked over comments I had received from judges in the contests both first round and final round. I suppose I was struggling with what it meant to have weak writing. Don’t think that I just fell off the turnip truck yesterday. I have a deck of cards that I made that I roll through in the editorial phase. I will be talking about those cards in future blogs. Those cards helped me find some of the obviously rookie mistakes writers make. Each card has a little reminder of something to screen the manuscript for. I’m not talking about those superficial things. It is deeper than that. After all the editing was complete and I couldn’t find anything else…. there was still the “weak writing” comments. I didn’t understand how to change or avoid it.

Last night I started reading a writers reference book and “Sokath His eyes uncovered” A little tiny book put understanding to the concepts I’ve been exploring and coming to terms with for a year.

I am going to spend some blog time talking about weak writing. How to recognize it. How to avoid it. My disclaimer is that this is not a lesson mastered. It is a lesson in progress. I yearn for the day when I will be a strong writer.

Okay, so in getting ready for this journey together…. What does it mean to you to be a weak writer or a strong writer? Perhaps you have it all figured out and I’m sitting on the floor of the short bus all alone. Leave a comment about your thoughts on weak writing.

Fantasy Man Monday – Body Art

So thinking about a fantasy man today. I like the dark edgy hero with a certain vulnerable broken quality. Not surprising I never could pick a good man in real life. Oh but perhaps that is an oxymoron. LOL Cynical much? Not me. I think I do best sticking to fictional men.

In any event, ahem moving right along. How do you feel about body art? Yes Tattoo art? What is an eww and how much is too much?

Feast your eyes on these. .

This could define a good chest or highlight the weakness of a poor one.

What about subject matter of the tattoo. Old girlfriends names are a forbidden, goes without saying. Religious icons? Flowers? Really really big gold fish? At what point is it one tattoo too many?

That girl is bad!

One of my favorite TV heroines is Abby on NCIS. The typical goth girl next door!

She is a wonderful three dimensional person. She bowls with the nuns, sleeps in a coffin and loves to main line her caffeine via soda pop.

What is not to love? She is the bomb.

Did I mention she is sexy hot as well?

And the best part she is such a cool science nerd! Bazinga!

I love Abby’s character, smart, witty, vunerable, nice, take no shit kinda girl. Some days she inspires me to be myself, without fear of judgement. And hey, we have the same hair color now!!!!

What do you think? Who is your favorite heroine from cinema or t.v.?

Fantasy Man Monday

Presidents Day and many of you are having a well deserved three day weekend. I however am chained to the desk of my day job wishing I was outside in the sunshine.

PRESIDENTS DAY

Is it less than tasteful to consider sensuality factor in the leader of the free world? Certainly there are points for charisma. Wiser minds than mine will have to ponder that philosophical line.

I failed to be inspired by any president living or dead for hotness factor in consideration of today’s traditional theme. I turned to actors who have portrayed President.

Bill Pullman in ‘Independence Day’ is probably on my top five list. Husky voice and can jump in a plane to shoot em up with the invading hoard.

And a close contender for sexy make believe president has to be actor, Harrison Ford. The exciting action adventure movie, ‘Air Force One’. He was kick ass bad in that role and the line “Get Off My Plane! Great dialogue. What else was there to say!

What would be my pick for president. Hummm Yes it would have to be some post apocalyptic zombie thing? The president could make an impassioned speech and then grab a semi-automatic monster sized gun and blaze a trail through the zombies.

Maybe? Shemar Moore would make the list.

Who would be your pick for the part?

Shoes

Someone reminded me of the thought, don’t judge until you walk a mile in someone else’s shoes. Which led me to thoughts of shoes. It is no secret that I really love shoes. I do have lots of shoes. They must be comfortable. That is the supreme rule one.

I’ve gotten a couple new pair of shoes this fall. During Black Friday shopping I found a pair a suede over the knee, high heeled boots. they are awesome and meet rule one perfectly. Just recently I bought a pair of short calf high heels. Again, rule one first and fantastic boots. www.youravon.com/kheinz to take a look at the wild shoes that Avon has available. Just follow the link shop my store and then put shoes in the search window. amazing!

I remember awhile back finding a blog that did a photo journalist review of a writers conference by taking pictures of participants shoes. It was hysterically funny. I can’t find the link now and it may have been several years ago. If anyone remembers it chime in so we can enjoy it again together.

This would give Cinderella pause

The glass shoe below comes from a blog on strange shoes.

Isn’t this one pretty? Probably doesn’t adhere to rule number one.

(We are just looking for fun and no copyright issues are intended.)

Writing is a Journey

Writing is a craft, an art, a career, an advocation.  Writing keeps me sane or rather, perhaps it channels my insantiny into socially acceptable norms.  I mean seriously …. voices in my head ….. The state mental hospital isn’t that far away my friends.

I always hope that 2010’s work in progress manuscript will be better than 2009, 2011 better than 2010, etc. I hope that I will be a stronger, tighter writer.  I wish to have a better grasp of voice, of deeper third point of view, get better at showing not telling.  As a somewhat organic writer I always hope to write less.  That is… to spend less time re-writing because of previous days and days of writing myself up a blind alley and finding myself in a plot corner from which there is no return. Delete, Delete, Delete. And lastly of course (for Abigail) I always hope to get better at knowing where to put those damn commas.

I feel the world changing.  I know this time is passing and soon there will be a revolution in my life that will change the face of everything I know.  Perhaps it makes me a little melancholy.  I’m MORE excited for the adventure. 

Writing is a lot of things to me but seldom a destination.  And while writing is so much a solitary occupation it is also rarely a journey one takes alone. Over the next few weeks I might highlight a few of those rare individuals who are brave enough to take this journey with me. So….keep reading…..

Lee Roland.  I brilliant author.  Her voice is clear and deep and a work of art. She broaches themes that sometimes unsettle me and always makes me think.  She presses me to be better than mediocre. Some will aspire to be a hollow reflection of her talent in days to come.  NAL recognized her talent this year and July, 2011 Viper Moon will hit shelves.  I hope she has a long line of success writing for them. She has paid her dues and endured the journey well. We all doubt ourselves at times. Lee didn’t let the negative voices stop her. I hope I can learn from her diligence and strength.

Charlie Allden was one of the first writers who could hear my voice. Maybe even before I could hear my voice. She is amazing. In critique while the rest of us are stumbling she zones in like a laser and knows precisely what to say that will be uplifting and most beneficial. I adore her work and can’t wait for her to get her call. She has given me excellent critique and I have cherished her wisdom. There are times when I know she saved me as a writer. She created a really cool blog for Science Fiction and futuristic readers. It encompass a variety of media, film, books, games. Great Great blog to read. I would love to see this blog, Smart girls SciFi go viral.

Abigail Sharpe is kind and witty. she is one Sharpe cookie *pun intended* She has a command of english that I would aspire to. This woman knows her mis-placed modifiers like they were kissin cousins and always, always, knows where to put those damn commas. Her voice has a delightful sense of humor that keeps me giggling as I read her work. All right, I will confess that sometimes I laugh out loud. Yep, she also will be getting the call one day very soon.

I tease her and say she is my Best Breast Buddy. Abigail heard my cancer story late one night during the 2009 Southern Lights writers conference. I may have been drinking wine and gave too candid a glimpse at the broken heroine inside me.

She was appalled that I had dropped out of follow-up after going into remission. She gave me her oncologist and her reconstruction surgeon. The imp followed up with me and I think if I had not made appointments on my own she would have made them for me and dragged me to them kicking and screaming. You have to have spent a year in cancer treatment to understand how I felt and why I ran from doctors after going into remission. It wasn’t the smart thing to do…no, not at all. Abigail as a cancer surviver knew what I was going through. She became my breast buddy that day. Love you girl. Now we discuss our surgeon’s long eye lashes and just how brilliant he is as the King of Tata’s. 2010 I completed Breast reconstruction surgery. I was gobstobbered at how much that outward change went toward helping me begin to heal some of the inward scars. But that is fodder for another blog, another day.

And then there is Jamie. Wickedly clever, intuitive, gifted, lyrical, Her voice contains lilting prose in almost every sentence. When you read her stories you are truly swept away to a different place and time. You want to cry when it is over for having taken the journey with her and that the time has ended to quickly. ((And NO JAMIE. I’m not blowing smoke your way just because you have my dream agent. pfffttt.))

Right now she is writing a blog that will give you a taste of her wonderful world. “I’m Trying to Do Something”